24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge, No. 32, 30/4/24, Part II Grain Rain

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This week Colleen gives us the writing invitation to experiment with the renga form:

"The month of April is ending, and it’s time for #TankaTuesday’s 24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry challenge. This week, the invitation is to try the renga form, creating a cooperative poem with alternating stanzas. A chance to get creative and have fun!"

Colleen has given us the first hokku and we respond  with the wakiku.  Then we provide the hokku and Colleen will respond with her wakiku - which you can read in the comments.


Colleen's hokku:
an empty attic
the sound of April showers
thunderous rumblings

My (Suzanne’s) reply – wakiku

birds squat with nests in the eves
fledglings flap their fluffy wings

My hokku: (kigo Summer sun)

open buds deepen
Summer sun waits in the wings
sonorous beauty

Colleen’s response – wakiku

my dandelion lawn blooms
with the sounds of bees at work

Colleen’s response first appeared in the comments….. which I have now added here for ease of reading…

Updated: If anyone else would like to add their own response wakiku in the comments I would love to read….😊 Suzanne

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My husband says I am a nightmare, actually, a ”complex nightmare”, said with love and understanding of course! In truth the phrase probably does sum me up which is why I will use it. Explanation:- • Complex due to my thoughts being varied, deep and even conflicting • Nightmare due to their constant, numerous and consuming nature. I am an emotional writer, finding writing a medium with which to express myself; I find this difficult verbally and am averse to any conflict. I am creative and artistic at work and hobbies; (working in jewellery) but only have enthusiasm for “bespoke” creations. I find it difficult to label a theme to my writing but recently am enjoying learning and experimenting with different forms of poetry. A few very difficult years emotionally have drawn me to this genre. Somehow, I am finding more clarity in my thoughts by using words that are not always so clear, or even placed in a structure that take me out of my comfort zone.... hmmm work that one out LOL. I am excited to see what I write, as it is a total surprise to me every time; but draws me.... My life experiences are such that I have a personal view on most subjects and if you follow me you may find my topics to be what my daughter would call “random”. Even when my focus is dark, I am actually a positive person by nature and have found strength to get through many obstacles in life - even if some "down" times are more lengthy than others ; maybe it is in my DNA - my blood group is B+ (be positive)! If you have read this, welcome to a bit of my world ....

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26 thoughts on “24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge, No. 32, 30/4/24, Part II Grain Rain”

  5. How fun is this? I love it and the word “sonorous.” ❣️ Great job!!

    Here’s my wakiku:

    my dandelion lawn blooms
    with the sounds of bees at work

    ***

    open buds deepen
    Summer sun waits in the wings
    sonorous beauty

    my dandelion lawn blooms
    with the sounds of bees at work

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      1. Same here. I love how the hokku (haiku) gives us the season. The last two lines are more spontaneous. They can lead the reader in unexpected ways. We’ll do this again. I think it’s worth the time and effort.

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